Tracked

train downtown city buildings

I thought saw him on the early train, with his black plaid jacket and his hair all rainy.

He nodded once, but it might have been a simple acknowledgment of this dreary Monday and tasks awaiting.

Then he was behind me in the coffee line—I smelled his aftershave and heard him tapping on his phone.

My bracelet buzzed and it was the sign I’d been waiting for all this time.

I ran to the pier, tripping on the stones, and stared at the bay as the graceful seagulls swooped down low.

The pale sun had faded away when they came to collect me and put me on the last train home.

~*~

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Written for Six Sentence Story.

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18 responses to “Tracked

  1. I wish that I understood poetry better, as I enjoy the words, but I think that they should mean more to me.

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  2. That’s a Chicago Transit Authority train, by the way.

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  3. I liked the part about tripping on the stones by the pier. I wonder who put her on the last train home, but I am glad she made it home.

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  4. It’s an intriguing six sentence tale… open to different interpretations, but since someone mentioned poetry I am reminded of Emily D’s because I could not stop for death…

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  5. Nice. I like the idea of the “6 sentence story,” too. Like flash fiction, only with (even more) restrictions. How to write like Hemingway.

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  6. You could turns this into a Six Serial, Paula. I’m keen to know what’s happening here!

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  7. Definitely intriguing! I can put myself in her shoes in several personal stories. 😊

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  8. Mysterious and engaging, Paula. I’m with Chris on this – has the makings of a serial Six for sure!
    Six Sentence Stories is absolutely a challenge, but I’ve found the more of them you write the easier it gets. Well, sometimes, lol
    Hope to read you at the SSS again soon 🙂

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  9. Ah, home. Where is it really, that’s the question.

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